2011年4月6日 星期三
How to Stay Healthy
Here are some methods to show you how to stay healhy. First of all, you should eat a lot of frults and vegetables. To avoid eating some pork and oil. It's harmful to your body. Second, you can do some exercise once a week, it's not only keep your figure slender but also make your mood happier. Third, do not staty up all night. According to a report ,if you stay up once time ,your heart and liver need to three days to renovate. Next time when you want to stay up, you should think twice. Finally, this way is the most important to your healthy. You should always be a good mood. In conclusion, you can stay healthy if you follow these method.
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To avoid eating some pork and oil.
回覆刪除避免吃肉跟油? 跟下面那句接起來怪怪的
*staty up = stay
*finally 那句可以用 last but not the least來寫
*be a good mood 應該是 in a good mood
還有你的結論句太多了
文法跟錯字不少你自己知道就好
回覆刪除其他了話
好像把焦點放在減重上面了
太瘦可能也不太好吧?
frults fruits
回覆刪除you can do some exercise once a week, it's not only keep your figure slender but also make your mood happier
it's 後面+Ving 然後 兩句用句號分開比較好吧
liver need to three days to renovate need 跟three days 不用to吧
once time 改成 one time 或 once吧?
針對pork這點還蠻有歧視意味的!!!
回覆刪除it's not only keep your figure slender but also make your mood happier
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if you stay up once time
one time就好
your heart and liver need to three days to renovate
你自己好好想一想 最後一字也可以用最近教的 restore
Next time when you want to stay up
句意很怪 很少人會想自己熬夜 通常是逼不得已
可以打 you are about to stay up
this way is the most important to your healthy
錯字
You should always be a good mood.
這不是常在教 要打 be in a good mood
healhy...healthy
回覆刪除frults...fruits
it's not only keep your figure slender but also make your mood happier...it not only keep your figure slender but also make your mood happier
Second, you can do some exercise once a week...怎麼會一週一次呢?不是一週三次嗎?
if you stay up once time ...one time嗎?once怪怪的
You should always be a good mood....You should always be in a good mood
staty...stay